This poem has 5 stanzas but, the final stanza splits. At the final line to give the effect of emphasis of separation which is the theme of the poem as he is talking about how he is separated from his dead parents. The poet uses so much detail about his parents and the picnic as he is remembering them in there times of happiness together and this might have been at picnics like the one described. I think Causely had a good relationship with his parents as he uses no negative language when talking about them in this poem. The stream has a great significance as it seems to present the river Styx in If which he feels separated from his parents as the have already crossed the stream or river Styx into the after life. I think that the poet is imiganing his parents in the after life as he says ‘I had not thought it would be like this’ which means to me that he never thought he would feel how he feels now he’s actually thinkin about his parents. I would compare this poem to the poem ‘when we two parted’ as they share a theme of separation and sadness.
Comparing the poems ‘neutral tones’ and ‘when we two parted’ representing the end of a relationship.
In the poem when we two parted by Lord Byron it shows the brake by emotions staged such as sadness,shame,anger and finally regret and betrayal where as in Neutral tones by Thomas hardy it is more of a story of how the relationship ended in the way he gives us details of the setting and how he saw the woman of whom which a relationship ended. But they do share a similarity they both use a regular rhyme scheme and both have four regular stanzas. The language in the way it is written is very different in when we two parted a older English is spoke for example “colder thy kiss” when compared to a line from neutral tones “the smile on ur mouth was the deadest thing alive enough to have strength to die” are completely different in effect as the older English spoke in when we two part sounds more like a live poem where as in neutral tones it’s more of a sad but true effect to the poem. Both poems present the end of a relationship in a melancholy series of events that lead to the same feelings such as sorrow and regret although one was about an affair they both represent the end of a relationship as a emotional process.
My modern take on the Christmas charol
Although the original Christmas carol was a piece that triggered a mass of people to donate money and inspired hundreds to write there own takes on the classic.
If I had the chance have a version I created on the screen as scrooge I would have Liam Neeson as he is such a versatile actor and in a modern take scrooge could be a lonely ex crime boss like in run all night and his fortune is his downfall as he too could save a child with a crippled body of which he caused and soon regretted.
As the three spirit s visit him they could be notorius gangsters such as Alcapone who shows that scrooge was once a sweet young child who of which fezziwig could be the one who got scrooge into crime and marley was the best friend that he lost and who is now trying to prevent the death of scrooge by warning scrooge to fix his mistake or he too will suffer a terrible fate and this would slowly dig into scrooge but I would add a twist where in the post credits he is shot by a blacked out figure who is death himself as too many good deeds were performed in scrooges lifetime.
This to me wouldn’t be the best adaption due to the ending but would be an overall interesting and twisted adaption.
Ajay
Do You Know
Do you know if you will live for tomorrow; do you know if you will go to prison tomorrow; do you know if you will learn tomorrow; do you know if you will break the law tomorrow;
Clear use of Anaphora here, Ajay, and some poignant questions asked. I would say that if a poem was truly Didactic it would provide answers as well as asking questions. Do you agree?
-RP
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